As I was walking down the corridors one day, I heard a voice.
“Out of sight, out of mind”, it said
“Out of sight, out of mind”, it whispered
And the words echoed from the halls of this almost empty building
Into the labyrinth of thoughts in my head.
I wondered as I whispered the saying again and again:
“Out of sight, out of mind”
“Out of sight, out of mind”
Too long has passed since I’ve seen you, too long has passed since we’ve talked
And still your name is written on the labyrinth walls.
“Out of sight, out of mind”
“Out of sight, out of mind”
And these thoughts seem to permeate the boundaries of reality;
Seeping into the everyday.
The walls seem to bear your name everywhere I look.
Letters forming patterns
On doors and bits of paper;
On menus and food packaging;
On billboards and neon signs that light up the skyline at night.
“Out of sight, out of mind”
“Out of sight, out of mind”
Each time those words left my lips, I believed them a little less;
Had I been completely blind I would still see your name scribbled upon these walls;
I’d still see your face in the shroud of impenetrable darkness.
For as I was walking down the corridors one day, I heard a voice.
“Out of sight, out of mind”, it said
“Out of sight, out of mind”, it whispered
And the words echoed from the halls of this almost empty building
Into the labyrinth of thoughts in my head.
And somewhere along the way most of the letters got lost
And the walls whispered your name instead.
I enjoyed this immensely…thank you!
Wow! Loved the way it ended. Nice work. Happy rallying!
That last line is a killer. Beautiful and bittersweet.
bravo, truth,
well done…
it is good to let it out and be done ,
Out of sight, out of mind, makes it easier to find,
those memories you get, when you’re trying to forget.
Last sentence was the punchline! But I enjoyed it all.
“I’d still see your face in the shroud of impenetrable darkness.”
loved the line. and yes my labyrinthine walls imitate your poetry 🙂
BRILLIANT!!!
waw nicely done! i loved the delivery! nicely ended!
please check mine too: “Beyond Silent Wars”
in my sight, into my mind! my thursday~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/12/30/let-it-be-it/
I agree the last line was genius. Great writing.
JP
http://tasithoughts.wordpress.com/2011/04/07/lovers-we-are-now/
Kudos to the way you have written up the mind-game..Totally gripping and the ending is just superb!
Alcina
..please visit poets who are here, but you did not reach initially, thanks, we call it return favors, part of the rule,
bless your Friday.
let us know after you are done 18 poets visiting…
I will, just waiting for the weekend. 🙂
Cute + Meaningful.
Cheers! 🙂
Wow. Very powerful.
beautiful and powerful 🙂 especially the ending! out of sight isn’t out of mind at all, not always anyway! nice one!
Rally Week 41 – My Poetry
Stupendous!! ur works are fascinating..
I am from ~
“That which we resist, persists” ~ Carl Jung. This was a powerful write, Silvertongue, even in its subtlety. Agree that the last line was the clincher!
Excellent. I love the idea… the ending is lovely